1) You are to write an introductory paragraph to the following prompt:"Analyze the impact of "salutary neglect in the development of democratic ideals. To what extent did "salutary neglect" lead to the American Revolution?
2) After posting, you must read and provide feedback to at least 2 introductory paragraphs from your classmates.
Due Date: September 21 2008 - 1159 PM
57 comments:
Salutary Neglect was a very good occurrence for the development of the colonies. England had other problems to deal with so it left the new world alone, to grow on its own. The individual colonies were separate in government and religion because of their reasons for being created. Then England got involved. The king and Parliament put restrictions on the colonies that infuriated them. They had been left alone for a very long time, established their own government, and had a strong economic system. Then England steps in and tells them what to do. This establishes the foundations for a revolution.
>Lauren Nash<
From the time England had established colonies in the New World until the colonies began to flourish, Britain had practiced the policy of salutary neglect. Through this policy, democratic ideals developed in the minds of colonists. Once the King ended salutary neglect, bitter feelings fueled the colonists. The colonies were not having many problems with the French or Indians or even Spanish, the colonies were only protected because of their monetary value, and the King took away much of the self-government the colonists had established. The end of salutary neglect sparked thoughts of revolution in the colonies.
The policy of "salutary neglect" greatly impacted the form of government that had been established in the colonies. It allowed the colonies to become accustomed to their own form of government. The colonies also adapted to the self control that they had over themselves. This was also a factor that led to the revolutionary war because they had been all alone until the seven years war. During and after the seven years war, the British had started to tax and watch the colonies much closer. This angered the colonists who had been on their own since they had been established.
Salutary neglect played a big role in the development of democratic ideals. The early colonies of America were able to self-govern with the protection of the king. This inabled the colonists to work together in a democratic way, making decisions by the vote of different people. Salutary neglect led to the American Revolution, because people were angry at Britain for ignoring them untill they were able to make a profit. Colonists saw that they were able to do things on their own with out the aid of England, although it may not have been as easy as they thought.
Comments to other writers:
Kyle- I thought your paragraph was well put together and easy to understand. You made really good points and kept it to the main point, with out going into too much detail. =]
Ravyn- Your points may have been good, but I'm not too sure because your paragraph was hard to read. You were writing in the past tense and then changed to the present. In addition to that, your first sentence doesn't really make since. I would spend more time revising before posting. :)
The end of Salutary Neglect was an important factor which led to both a Democratic and self-governed society in the colonies and also to the American Revolution. When Britain started strictly enforcing Palimentary Laws [ending Salutary Neglect] upon the colonists, the colonists became upset and decided 'enough is enough - time for independence.' Thus, the late American Revolution [following shortly after the Seven Years War] started.
response 1 @ ravyn:
You brought up a lot of good points. Nice!
response 2 @ kyle:
I like your last sentence... dunno why, but I do. yayayayay!
Britain's policy of salutary neglect, present prominently during the period of time leading up to the American Revolution, made it almost a necessity for the American colonists to develop largely on their own, and encouraged them to become more independent. Though, when Britain stepped in and assumed its "parenting" role, the Americans felt trodden upon and responded with anger and resentment. All of these things added to the tension that eventually sparked a Revolution in America.
Since the colonies were founded by England, they had practiced salutary neglect. England was always at war with another country so they didnt have time to worry about some tiny colonies in a land not well known. This allowed the colonies to form their own self governments and religions, which also led to their democratic ways of thinking. But when England got involved with the colonies after the Seven's Year War they started putting all these ridiculous taxes on the colonies and the colonists did not like it. With the end of salutary neglect and the taxes on the colonies this lead to the thinking of a revolution.
If a child is neglected it will become independent and if an outside force (like the parents) tries to opress and end this independence the child will inevitably rebel. This is a representation of the relationship between Britain and America in the 1700's (Britain being the opressor and America being the child).When America was left to its own devices it created a self-government based off of the colonists' common desire for freedom and peace. When Britain ended salutary neglect in 1763 a normally free America was forced to obey limiting acts. This caused a feeling of defiance to arise within a small group of colonists. This minority of rebels inspired a revolution to try to regain independence from Britain.
Kyle, I like the way you just get the facts out there. I don't have to sift through any "implications" or "deep thought" questions or anything. I know the point you are trying to get across.
My only suggestion is to give some actual reasons (like, how did the colonists feel? how many colonists felt this??) for the establishment of foundations for a revolution.
Rachel.
Good job explaining why salutary neglect caused development of democracy and also why the "lack of" salutary neglect led to the revoltuion. I liked it, knew what you were saying and thought it was well organized :)
America was as it is today; a composition of people more inclined to complain about what they don't have than to embrace what they do. Salutary neglect basically developed because of political turmoil in England calling for a consolidation of the motherland. America just got lucky that England was too busy to care. Salutary neglect allowed the colonists to diversify their religion and culture without the social norms of England. It allowed America to develop an independent economy, not so tightly bound by mercantilism as its contemporaries. It allowed the colonists to govern as they desired: from democratic town meetings of New England, to aristocratic governing of South Carolina. Having these advantages for an extended period of time instilled into the colonists a predilection to complain about every little hand England tried to take in the colonial government. Post-salutary neglect, revolution was inevitable.
Rachel: Your thesis is misplaced.
Ravyn: weak thesis.
Salutary neglect impacted the democratic ideals of American colonists and helped guide Americans to their revolution. During the period of salutary neglect, the American colonies developed an independence from Great Britain. Within this independence, American colonists established a way to support themselves without Great Britain's help. This development of freedom allowed American colonies to obtain their own working democracy.
At the end of the salutary neglect period, Great Britain attempted to come back and rule over the American colonists, which led to the American Revolution.
My two critics-
Rachel,
I think your paragraph was very good, because it was short and you didn't go overboard with details.
Although, I noticed one mistake.
I think when you said, "The early colonies of America were able to self-govern with the protection of the king." I think you meant to say "without" the protection of the king. This is the only thing I saw that you may want to re-do later on. Overall, nice work!
Kyle,
I think you used a great choice of words in your paragraph and it was very easy to follow! Good job!
Since the colonies were first established, salutary neglect played a big role in their development. Because Britain had a very easy grasp on the colonies, they were able to develop their own governments and practice their own religions. After the seven year’s war, salutary neglect ended as Britain enforced harsh taxes and rules in the colonies. As the colonists started to feel used by Britain, they started to rebel by not following orders. This new rebellious nature sparked the American Revolution as colonists decided that they no longer needed Britain.
When a fire is left untamed with fuel and oxygen, it often consumes a forest. When Salutary Neglect left colonies to develop their own economy, government, and societal infrastructure, independent spirit thrived in the colonies and attachment to England waned. Once England attempted to further capitalize upon and contain the now independent flame with Navigation Acts, the Proclamation of 1763, and the Grenville Acts, the blaze only spread faster and wilder. The Sons of Liberty formed, smuggling obtained a certain chic, and nonimportation agreements were made. Such activities funneled directly into Committees of Correspondence and Continental Congresses. Dissent ravaged through the colonies via propaganda and insurgency. Cries for independence were just common enough to break ties with England and fight for an independence which would harvest itself as democracy.
This is my comment to Kyle
I like how he combines all of the paragraph with one another. Also, he lists good facts about the colonies with France and Spain and their self-governments. Overall I like this paagraph about the impact of salutary neglect.
This is my comment to Seth
I like how he say's salutary neglect allowed the colonies to become accustomed to their own form of government. This is a very true statement. Also, I like how he combines the Seven Years War with British ending salutary neglect. This is a very good introductary paragraph
England for so long had "salutarly neglected" the colonies. Colonists had began to think democratically and developed their own government. When England decided to interfere again in the colonies this angered the colonists and bittered their feelings. Now England was taking away the self-government that colonists had developed and had used to protect themselves.When "salutary neglect" had ended and the king was trying to take over again the thoughts of a revolution loomed in many of the colonists minds.
2) Wow kyle I really liked the way you worded your paragragh I thought you got right to the point and was very informational and clear!
3) I liked how you mentioned that the colonists saw themselves as independent from england and how they didnt need the aid of england anymore.
When the American colonies were first settled by British trading companies the king agreed to let them govern, trade, and prosper without Brittan’s help. This is called salutary neglect and it worked very well for the colonies until the late 1700’s when problems arose between the French and the colonists. Brittan was called for military help and the king realized how independent the colonists had become. Incredible resentment fallowed when the king started governing and taxing the colonists later turning into a revolutionary war.
Seth- Your intro. paragraph read fairly well but make sure that when you use pronouns they are well defined. Overall I liked your paragraph.
Rachel- Great structure in your paragraph. You should try to stay away from overusing pronouns because it becomes repetitive. Great use of the topic for the paragraph.
Kyle
sweet wording at the end it was very interesting yet really explained the things to come
Rachel
Really nice paragraph maybe just a little to much info but good points and well stated!
The establishment of the colonies in the new world was primarily based on mercantilism. England believed that they didn't have to worry to much about the colonies and developed Salutary Neglect. Because of the wars in Europe England never officially set a goverment in place for the colonist and soon they developed their own forms of government and media. This would later lead to the Revolutionary War.
Salutary neglect gave the American colonies the right to have their own form of government; this policy was the reason that democratic ideals developed in the colonies. They prospered on their own for a long period of time, until the king ended salutary neglect. The British began to put restrictions on the colonists and tax them. Because the colonies had been self-governed for so long, they were angered when England began to take control. Feelings of bitterness within the colonies led to the beginning of the American Revolution.
Seth, very rich and tasty intro. I would love to read more from you. :) I like how you dropped big event names. Good JOb!
Rachel, I love how you stated that the colonist had the protection from the King. I think thats a huge deal because that is what kept the French or the Spanish from ever over taking us.
Salutary neglect led to the development of American democracy and later to the American Revolution. While Britain turned a blind eye on the young colonies, the settlers enjoyed freedoms unheard of in the eighteenth-century world, including self-government. The idea of a government “of the people, by the people, and for the people” really started in the town meetings of New England, where the colonists were left to fend for themselves. After the French and Indian War, when England suddenly took a strict hand in colonial government, the settlers revolted to regain what they had come to see as their birthright.
Feedback
1) Kyle's paragraph included the amount of detail appropriate for an introductory paragraph; it summed up the impact of salutary neglect nicely.
2) Seth's paragraph also gave the main idea without going into too much detail.
Went the colonies were first established Great Britain practice salutary neglect on the colonies. That forced the colonies to create their own government. Once the king ended salutary neglect, the colonies did not like the king totally controlling them. The king started to tax the colonies which infuriated the colonists. Some of the taxes made items cheaper but it took independents away from the colonies. Salutary neglect was not the only reason the Revolutionary war started but was a main factor in it.
Salutary neglect played a major role in the development of democratic ideas in America. Because England was preoccupied with their own obstacles, America was left to fend for themselves for many years, giving them a feel for independence and self-government. America became accustomed to this way of life,making them question England's authority over them, leading to the Revolution. The colonists demonstrate the development of democratic ideas through their unity as one nation, the Continental Congress, and the Declaration of Independence.
Hello Kyle
I really enjoyed reading your introduction paragraph because it had a lot of ideas that I agreed with. It was very well written. It showed me that you really knew what you were talking about.
Kyle how about those Falcons?
What Rachel?
I liked your introduction paragraph because it was put together real well. It had a lot of interesting ideas.
Good job!
seth- you have really good information, but try and put some of what you are saying at the end into the body of your composition. Great start though!
rachel- I think your last sentance of your paragraph is really good because it's setting up your body for what you are going to say next, but make sure you aren't too vague, add some specific things that weren't easy for the colonists and put them into a thesis statement.
Salutary neglect was a major factor in the uprising conflicts leading to the American Revolution. England's idea of salutary neglect left the English colonies in the New World alone to be self-governed. During that time the individual colonies started to sprout new ideas and standards of living that helped fortify a sense of peace in America. Then, England withdrew salutary neglect from the colonies. This lead to restrictions and new laws minimizing the colonist's freedom which set up a foundation to start a revolution.
in reply to kyle
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dear kyle,
your overall structure of your paragraph seemed well built. You had one very detailed and long sentence that probably couldve been cut short or even used in one of your 'meat' paragraphs. well done though my boy.
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in reply to seth
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dear yuk-yuk,
Nice usage of vocabulary and grammer. Nice and neat. Got right down 'to the point'
England gave her colonies salutary neglect in a kind of laissez-faire manner because the colonies were a kind of business. After the French and Indian war Britain had amassed a huge empire and looked toward reorganizing said empire by ending salutary neglect. Debt had to be paid for and England was determined to get it from the colonies, causing many groups to revolt against England resulting in the American Revolution. When the declaration of independence and the bill of rights were formed the new country thought of how Britain had wronged them of their democratic ideals of among other things freedom of speech, freedom to assemble, and search warrants.
The fact that England let America remain on their own when the colonies were in dire need of assistance caused them to learn how to develop on their own in many different aspects. America had to learn how to govern themselves and adapt to the new cultures that immigrated in search of freedom. Also this in fact made them a more unified and strengthen country. England is the antagonist
in this tug of war for power and indepandence. Finally the many repeated atemtps to tax the colonies only angered and deeped the already bitter feelings towards England.
The colonies were greatly influenced by England's idea to neglect the colonies. It made them independent, which led to the need for a government. The government itself, once created, led to the colonist's to believe that they could be self-sufficent, and didn't need British influences anymore. When the British tried to tax the colonists the colonists became angry, and began revolting, which led into war.
Seth- Mono. But your last three sentences could be put into a better order, or combined or something.
Kyle- Very nice. I like
2) I liked what Rachel said about the colonists being angery at England and how the colonists saw that they could survive woth out England.
3) I also like how Lauren sais that salutary neglect was a good thing fo rthe colonies. Also how she said that England left them alone and then tried to step back in.
Without the idea of salutary neglect, Colonial America would have never prospered in such a way, beneficial towards independence. It developed a mindset of self-dependence and a willingness to obtain a new chance at life. Having this carved into the colonists' minds would definitely effect England's chance of controlling the colonies. This conflict would grow substantially and soon reach the level of war.
Seth:
You have a very smooth introduction with a lot to expand on. This will be easy to form the rest of your paper.
Rachel:
Nice introduction. I wasn't too sure about your 4th sentence. It didn't seem to flow too well with everything else but still provides valuable information. Your last sentence, on the other hand, left for a great way to lead into your paper.
Salutary neglect—the British policy of permitting colonial territories to develop independently of Britain itself—proved exceptionally conducive in the development of democratic ideals; this policy thus proved influential in a general progression toward independence. As a corollary of the French and Indian War—known in Europe as the Seven Years’ War—England experienced a distinctly intensified contempt held in regard to their colonial contemporaries; bitter feelings in turn prompted an apparent “need” for complete and colossal reorganization, pertaining to—quite obviously—the British American Empire. In this manner, an era during which salutary neglect proved prevalent had essentially been abrogated; proclamations, laws, and acts developed to both benefit the “mother country” and place restrictions upon colonial actions. Such changes in British economic and empirical policies greatly angered self-considered American colonists; sustaining self-sufficiency in thought had expanded during and after the French and Indian War to include self-sufficiency in general matters of unity and protection. Further motherly protection thus appeared unnecessary. A collective sentiment of resentment, in this manner, provided a substantial foundation from which more tangible notions of rebellion might develop.
All in all, salutary neglect made the colonies. The absence of a "helicopter " parent country allowed America to spread out and do what they want. Merchants were relatively free to trade with whoever they chose. Settlers started shifting focus westward to fertile, untouched wilderness. The lack of political guidance also led to the founding of many democratic beliefs. Without the king directly governing the colonies, lots of room was left for independent legislatures to rise and have a large say in the politics surrounding their represented colonies. And when Britain decided to bring an end to this period of ignorance with the Proclamation of 1763, the colonists, being unaccustomed to attention and restraint, fought to break away from parental constraints like the increased enforcement of mercantilism and the no settling zone west of the Appalachians. The subsequent unrest played a crucial part in the foreplay leading to the American Revolution.
Critique #1:
Tyler... I thoroughly enjoyed reading your introductory paragraph; the analogy was solid and easily relatable, and yet not overdone... very nice support!
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Critique #2:
Emmett... I absolutely LOVE your concluding sentence! Very resolved and well-written.
Chipper - Good, gets straight to the point. But i thought the transition from the first sentence to the second one was hard to follow.
Seth - Very good, states a lot of facts in only a few sentences. Thought it was a bit choppy though, maybe u could combine 1 or 2 sentences and then add a new one?
The policy of salutary neglect played a major role in the formation of the beliefs of the colonists.The colonies were mostly left alone to fend for themselves, and they injoyed certain freedoms that other english citizens did not.The colonists grew accustomed to their individual freedoms and diliked when the British began to invade upon those freedoms after the Seven Years War. These hard feelings played a huge part in sparking the Revolutionary War.
Seth- Thought your paragraph was very well written and to the point. :)
Ravyn- Like your pargraph. It had good information, but was a little choppy. Might be easier to convey information if it was smoothed out a little bit
Patrick - Careful about your phrasing. Britain practiced Salutary Neglect, not colonists. Also, colonists did not create new religions, but mostly practiced non-anglican variations of christianity somewhat freely. Your point is pretty clear, but you might want to avoid phrases like "all these ridiculous." Stay unbiased. Your supporting examples were well placed and would be easily referenced in the body. The introduction was solid, overall.
Katie - Maybe this is nit-picky, but Salutary Neglect wasn't conjured by a King. Robert Walpole, the first Prime Minister, set the policy in motion. Also, the colonies weren't all established by trading companies (think Georgia, Middle Colonies, and New England). To generalize my critique, I think you should avoid generalizations like those aforementioned. They kind of make it seem like you might be faking your way through the writing. Your purpose, on the other hand, is clear. Thumbs up.
Chipper,
I really liked your paragraph! It was short, sweet, and to the point. I also liked the examples you gave. Good job!
Alexxxx,
You also did a very good job. The parenthesis were a nice touch, and you gave a good example of what the Americans were thinking as well. YAYYYY.
Hai Chipper.
Good intro. I really don't see anything wrong with it-- maybe just specifically mention democracy.
Molly-- good. very good. i like. much.
Carter walker- a bit on the long side but it works. I think you are using the - a little too much and the words take some time to fully comprehend. The essay would be perfect for an English major: long descriptive words and somewhat concise.
Emmett- 1st sentence sounds cut off. The rest is good solid information but maybe it could be rewritten by condensing most of the paragraph and leaving the information for later.
Carter walker- a bit on the long side but it works. I think you are using the - a little too much and the words take some time to fully comprehend. The essay would be perfect for an English major: long descriptive words and somewhat concise.
Emmett- 1st sentence sounds cut off. The rest is good solid information but maybe it could be rewritten by condensing most of the paragraph and leaving the information for later.
Salutary Neglect was very important to the American Revolution. Ever since the immigrants arrived in America, they have had to fend for themselves. The colonists were just starting to get to the point where they could thrive independently when parliament and the king stepped in enforced taxes and laws that the colonists viewed as unfair. The Americans felt that their mother country neglected them for so long, that when they finally grew up, they were grounded. Without salutary neglect, the Revolution would have never occured because the Americans would have never had the confidence to declare for their independence as a country.
1. I liked what Peter Bihl said about Britains side of the story. It gives a diffrent point of view for the British.
2. I also think Tyler Wood made a good analogy at the beggining of his paragraph.
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