1) You are to write an introductory paragraph to the following prompt:
"Although New England and the Chesapeake region were both settled largely by people of English origin, by 1700 the regions had evolved into two distinct societies. Why did this difference in development occur?"
2) After posting, you must read and provide feedback to at least 2 introductory paragraphs from your classmates.
Due Date: September 3rd 2008 - 1159 PM
66 comments:
This difference in development occurred from the two societies having different views on religion, how they would be governed and their life style differences. A key factor in this difference of development is how they first emigrated here. The Chesapeake colony was formed with more men and fewer women, which meant that the men were looking to have a family. On the other hand, the New England colony was formed of more families. This region was becoming populated by more immigrants. Religion played a major role because the Chesapeake area, such as Maryland, was based on the Catholic religion. The New England area was based on a Puritan religion, even though Puritanism was declining. The Chesapeake colonies had indentured servants and then the first slave ship was then introduced in 1619. They also had the House of Burgesses in Virginia. The Chesapeake colonies were finally starting to become independent, while the New England colonies started to have more of a mixed economy with more urban societies.
Despite the fact that both New England and Chesapeake were settled by England,the regions developed into two very different societies.The Chesapeake region was developed by mostly second sons seeking immediate wealth.As opposed to the Puritans, who came to New England seeking religious freedom while trying to be an example of a god lead community. The settlers reasons for coming to the New World were completely opposite of one another, resulting in such a different way of culture and government.
By 1700, New England and the Chesapeake region grew into two distinct societies. This difference in development happened for many different reasons. Both regions were populated by people of English ethnicity, but over time, cultural differences influenced separation. The New England region was a society built around fishing for cod and worshiping God. The Chesapeake Bay region was built around agriculture, mainly tobacco, and slavery. The Chesapeake area believed in religious freedom, while the New England area believed that freedom of religion should not be accepted. Both religions had different laws and ways of governing their societies. For instance, New England established the Mayflower Compact, a direct democracy for all men only if you were a pilgrim and the Chesapeake region established rights to Englishmen based on status and nobility. Overall, the difference in development of the two societies occurred due to different beliefs of economy, religion and agricultural ideas.
The Chesapeake and New England regions developed differently because of many opposing cultural and ideological opinions. For one, the Chesapeake region relied on Slavery to make money and run smoothly, while the New England colonies were weary on the use of slaves. Another difference would be urbanization in the New England colonies versus small towns [like Waynesboro! (just kidding!)] in the Chesapeake. Womens' roles and lives were also effected between the two regions; for example, in the Chesapeake, when a woman became a widdow, she would hold the deed to her [husband's] land, while in New England, a wife and husband would sign on the land together due to longer life spans. Finally, but not lastly, there was a difference in how they ran their economy. In the Chesapeake region, they relied on tobacco exporting as a way to get rich [which later led to inflation], however, in the New England colonies, they made lots of money from exporting and importing goods via their many ship ports. These and many more reasons contribute to the reason why the New England colonies and the Chesapeake colonies developed so differently.
Reply 1 @ Jennah: Good point with bringing in the family values as a point. Also, Maryland was a highly Catholic colony but was not exclusive to the Catholic religion.
Reply 2 @ Ross: "The settlers reasons for coming to the New World were completely opposite of one another, resulting in such a different way of culture and government." Perhaps you should expand on this if it were like a test or something ... maybe.
Upon reflecting apropos the development of early America and the New World colonies, one comes to realize that a distinct pattern of socialization arose for each of the two major sections of English colonization. The sections are commonly referred to as New England and The Chesapeake Region. The two societies matured differently due to several key factors, mainly those of the environmental and religious persuasion. Different climates and growing conditions influenced varied types and amounts of agriculture in New England and The Chesapeake. For example; the rocky soil of New England gave the Puritans a difficult time in growing much of anything, while tobacco and other cash crops flourished in Virginia’s loamy swamplands. Also, differences in religion caused the sects to develop differently. The Puritans in New England developed close-knit townships where the common folk were made to fear venturing much farther than the end of the lane, and actually built fine schools to encourage young men to become members of clergy and become educated. The people of the Chesapeake were extremely daring and adventurous, and were constantly getting into scraps with the natives. They moved ever westward and lived on gigantic plantations, miles from their closest neighbors. Due to the large expanse of the land they covered, schools, whether they be public or private, were virtually unheard of and were quite hard to initiate if they were even wanted at all. All of these things steadily caused the colonies to break away from their mother England, and develop into their own different entities.
Even though the Chesapeake colony and the New England colony were both settled by England, they both had very distinct societies. They both had different views on government, religion, and the way they would live their lives. One difference in the two colonies was that the Chesapeake colony was meant to be a propietary colony and the New England colony was meant to be where the outcasts like the Puritans were supposed to go. Also, the New England colony was mostly made up of huge families with money, while the Chesapeake colony was made up of second sons trying to make money, and also there were very few women. The religion of the New England colonies was mainly Puritanism and the religion of the Chesapeake colonies was a mix of everything. The Chesapeake colonies were inhabited by indentured servants until slaves started coming over in 1619. The difference in the two colonies occured because they were opposites and had different views on life and government.
Qualities developed in the societies of the Chesapeake and of New England causing them to unfold into very distinctive areas with unique identities. Religion was tolerated, agriculture developed, and the Native American response to colonization are but a few of these causes. The growing “impurity” of the Anglican Church gave way to the founding of New England. Establishment of the Chesapeake region was mainly through hopes that it would serve as a money maker for England. People of today identify these colonies by these characteristics which, when explained in more detail, can be better understood.
I think Jennah's and Valerie's paragraphs have a lot of good information in them and prove some good points, however, it might be a little too detailed for just an introductory paragraph. Not to say your comments shouldn't be mentioned, but maybe not in an introductory. Jennah, I liked how you mentioned the difference in families versus single men in the two regions. Valerie, I thought your statement about the mayflower compact versus status and nobility was a good point as well. I think you should explain that more when you write your supporting paragraphs.
1.) Molly's paragraph was pretty good. I enjoyed the fact that she used a unique word to start it out rather than going with a commonly used word. The length was perfect for me because I know that when I see an extra long paragraph I already dislike it before I read it so hers being small made it more appealing to me.
2.) Jennah's paragraph was full of details but was very lengthy. The trouble with stating all of those details in the introductory paragraph is that the facts might end up being repeated and the effects the paper could have would be dulled.
The Chesapeake region and the New England region ended up being two completely different societies. This seperation in society happened because the lands were geographically different. Agriculture became the most important form of business for the Chesapeake area, and fishing for cod was a huge business for the New England region. Another key factor that made a difference in their societies were the people that came to the new world from both colonies. The settlers who lived in the Chesapeake area were not planning on staying, so there were hardly any women and children. The Puritans planned on staying, so they brought their families, and their indentured servants with them. And finally, the two colonies were founded and built for different reasons. The settlers from the Chesapeake region came to become wealthier, and the Puritans came to form a completely new society and to have religious freedom.
There are alot of reasons to why the New England and Chesapeake regions developed in diffrent ways. The reason that stood out to me was the diffrence in their whole purpose of migrating. Settlers in the Chesapeake were composed of mostly young men searching for riches, since they knew they weren't going to recieve inheritance from their father (they were the younger brother). They also wanted to start a family. New England settlers were angry with the Church of England because they thought the pureness of the church was on the downslide, so they decided to bring their whole family over to start a better version of Puritanism in Northeastern America until it was okay to return to England. Since the southern settlers were focused on money, they turned there attention to aquiring as much land as possible, searching for gold and eventually gowing tobacco, as well as aquiring slaves for labor later on. New England settlers basically turned all of their attention to making sure everything about their life was pure to god, causing alot of stress about the way the church's system was running, and eventually leading to the Great Awakening.
Even though the New England and Southern colonies were settled at about the same time by mostly English colonists,they had entirely different societies for a number of reasons. First of all, New England was settled by the deeply religious Puritans and Separatists fleeing religious persecution; the south was colonized by gentlemen coming to make a quick profit. Also, because New England attracted permanent settlers, entire families came and the family soon became the center of social life. In the south, poor young men made up a vast majority of the population and families were weakened by frequent deaths. Finally, as the south was settled, plantation farming dominated the economy. Settlers spread out across the land planting huge tobacco fields, affecting not only the economy, but also society and politics. Citizens were governed by wealthy landowners who represented large areas, and schools churches were thinly spread through the sprawling communities. In contrast, New England’s rocky soil forced colonists to group together in tight towns. These were governed by fully democratic town meetings (for converted males) and revolved around religion and education.
Molly, I like what you said about the second sons coming over so that they could seek immediate wealth. I forgot about that and that played a major role in the two distinct societies developing.
Valerie, you had very good detail in your introduction paragragh. I liked how you talked about the different ways the colonies were governed and you included examples such as the The Mayflower Compact and the nobility status on the Englishmen.
I think that Jennah did a great job on pointing out the major reasons why New England and the Chesapeake regions had evolved into to distinct societies by 1700. She included a lot of the same factors that I included in my introductory paragraph about the reasons for differences in development. I think that it was a very good thing that she stated that religion played a major role in the separation of the societies. Overall, I think that Jennah answered the question with good support. The only thing that I would say that maybe should have been kept in mind was that we were writing an introductory paragraph and since it is the introduction to an essay, we shouldn't go overboard with details that we could include in later paragraphs. (we could run out) I actually did the same thing and when I looked it over I realized that I might have went into too much detail for an introduction, but I guess a lot of details could never hurt.
Although the two main colonies from the Chesapeake and New England region coexisted for the benefit of the same mother country, they both eventually ended up as completely different colonies. There are many smaller reasons for the split into two diverse colonies, but all these reasons revolve around the fact that the colonies came to the New World as groups of people seeking two different things. The majority of the Chesapeake settlers were young, semi-wealthy men who came alone with the idea that they could make their fortune off the land and sail back to England one day. Independence played a huge role in the formation of the Chesapeake colonies. The New England settlers came to the New World seeking a kind of religious freedom the motherland couldn't provide them with. These settlers came to the New World with the intention and motivation to form the purest settlement without any religious corruption. With New England's religious and family based society, it formed into a more dependant society in contrast to the Chesapeake's individual based society. The original intention of the two colonies is what ultimately caused the differences.
Comment on Ms. Ross
I think your introduction gets straight to the point. I like it.
Comment on Ms. Valerie
I think your intro is full of valuble information, but the small details need to be in the body of the paragraph instead of the introduction. Keep the intro to the overarching cause of the split.
Although the New England and the Chesapeake region were founded and settled by the English people they had extreme differences in reasoning. The New England colonies were settled mainly for religious relief from persecution. The puritans believed that the Church of England was becoming impure. When the puritan’s received there charter they wisely took it with them and intentionally settled outside the grasp of the English King in the New World. The Puritans brought Families and planned to lead the world by example as “the city on the hill.” The Chesapeake region was settled by second sons who didn’t have any rights to land in England. They farmed because of the fertile soil and spread out on large plantation. The Chesapeake settlers did not expect to stay causing the majority of emigrants to be males. The lack of women lead to difficulties in population and growth.
I'm not sure where the feedback is suppose to go, so i'm leaving it right here :)...
1. Jennah!!! Way to drop dates and titles like House of Burgesses and 1619. Good Job! lol I think the only thing you could have added is how the Chesapeake colony was more concerned with making money then establishing balanced and equal cities like the New England Colonies.
2.Ross :) cool name.. lol Um I liked yours alot. Nice short and sweet. Hehe. You def. dropped some key ideas that i think i should have focused more on like the second sons and what not. You might want to go into detail on the last sentence BUT I guess it is just an introductory and i was being stupid with mine
Even though New England and the Chesapeake Bay were both settled by people of English origin, the regions evolved into two distinct societies by the 1700’s. The difference in development occurred because of the search for instant wealth, religious differences, and self-government. The motive behind the first people to reach the Chesapeake Bay region was for their short-term goal of finding gold and becoming wealthy easily. While this goal wasn’t achieved by very many, they still thrived economically by introducing a new product, Tobacco. Meanwhile, Puritans who were seeking religious freedom were populating New England and planned to establish permanent settlements. New England was based on self-government and democracy, which helped the Puritans to form their own rules and regulations for new legacies such as public education. While the Puritans worked hard to become a perfect religious colony, the Chesapeake Bay region’s economy fell downwards from the decreased price of Tobacco. These differences led to two very distinctive societies in which the Chesapeake Bay started to become independent and the Puritans tried to reach up to expectations by becoming the “city on a hill.”
In response to Molly Ross,
I definitely agree with your introductory paragraph. The second sons were very eager to find gold and to become rich quickly and the Puritans were only interested in making a good life for themselves by seeking religious freedom. Since their reasons for coming to the New World were so different, the outcome was that their culture and government differed drastically.
Also, you wrote very well and your paragraph was quick and to the point!
This is my response to molly
I like the fact that your paragraph is short and to the point. Also, you are right when you say they came here for completely opposite reasons.
In the 1600’s two different regions of the newly discovered Americas were settled. Though the settlers came from mainly the same European background their cultures were very different. By the 1700s these differences had grown and the New England colonies were distinctly seen as separate from the Chesapeake regions. New England was the settled area of the puritans escaping the evil powers of King Charles, and the Chesapeake a place for wealth and riches to be made by poor gentlemen. The religion, geography, and family structure influenced the separate development and shaping of them both.
this is my response to jennah
I like the fact that you stayed on topic throughout the paragraph. I like how you listed three things you wanted to talk about and that you went in to them a little bit also. overall I like your paragrapgh
In response to Valerie Woods,
I agree that the reasons that the New England and Chesapeake Bay regions differed was because of their economy, religion, and agricultural values/ideas. Religion definitely played a big role in both regions since the Puritans didn't have much religious freedom and the Chesapeake Bay region was open to it. These different religions led to the different ways in which both of these regions governed themselves.
Good introductory paragraph! You really had some good points and details!
Driven by different motives the New England and Chesapeake regions developed into two contrasting societies. Although the English founded both, motives for colonization were different. Receiving a charter from King James the Virginia Company set sail towards the Chesapeake with a ship full of Englishmen who were seeking fortune elsewhere because of primogeniture. Very rarely did entire families migrate and usually the main source of population growth was European indentured servants. Nobody intended to stay permanently. Meanwhile, non-separatist Puritans inspired the “Great Migration” to the northern area of the New World in order to purify the Church of England. The immigrants purposefully fell “off-course” and wound up just outside the boundaries of the king. Given an extremely large amount of independence the Puritans became a faltering example of the “City on a Hill”. Along with motives, the terrain of the two locations also had an effect on the culture that developed. In the Chesapeake land was very rich and fertile. The rivers were perfect for traveling and agriculture soon became the leading source of wealth. In New England the soil was rocky and the rivers were unfit for travel due to strong currents. Westward travel became difficult so everyone remained in one area thus creating the first cities. Families came over to stay permanently and increased the population by natural reproduction.
The story of the settling of the New England and Chesapeake colonies is similar to the fable of the three pigs. The determined, confident puritans were prepared for the stark Massachusetts air; they were industrious and built their towns strong in defiance of the hardships the new colonies offered. They built their houses of brick. The Chesapeake colonists came to the new world seeking instant gratification. Imediate sucess and fame were all they expected and their work ethic mirrored that. They were the houses of straw. Just as in the story of the three little pigs, the early colonists taught us that the hardwork of the puritans pays off while the lethargy of the chesapeake colonists lead to suffering.
1) Score one for katie keefer. Her paragraph is short, to the point, and doesn't have too much info. It could possibly be more engaging though.
2) Amber's paragraph is a little too lengthy and has too much info. You have to kind of wade through the info to find the thesis.
Katie,
I really liked your paragraph!
It was short and to the point.
It is a good example of how to not go overboard with details, but still include enough information that can lead you into your next paragraph. It was good that you stated that religion contributed to the split into the two different societies, because I think that religion played an important role in the separation. Overall, I think you did a great job! Nice work!
To Dylan: I liked your information and style (using words like apropos and loamy). The paragraph could have been shorter and some of the details left for the body.
To Michael: I thought your paragraph was perfect--short and to the point, but long enough to get the point across.
The major reason why New England and the Chesapeake region developed differently was because the immigrants' motives for coming to each of these places were very different. Immigrants to New England were primarily Puritans, searching for a place to practice their religion and raise their families. The Chesapeake region, on the other hand, was based on religious freedom and the use of slaves to maintain a sound economy. The two colonies were founded for completely different reasons, creating a significant cultural difference.
Feedback
1) Molly, I thought your paragraph was a perfect introduction because it was to the point and it didn't go into too much detail, which really should be in the body of an essay rather than the intro.
2) Peter, I liked your comparison of the settlements and the story of the three little pigs. It will help me remember the difference.
How could two societies like the New England and Chesapeake settled by the same mother-country develop differences? The answer can be found within the motives of the two immigrant groups. The Puritans came to New England in search of religious freedom, which was not offered in England. Alternatively, the Chesapeake region was made up of second sons with a get-rich-quick mentality. Economically, New England had poor soil and had to resort to fishing and shipbuilding, whereas the Chesapeake region became profitable from cash crops like tobacco. The Chesapeake settlers promoted religious freedom compared to the New England settlers who were primarily Puritan. The two settlements were also unlike in their forms of government, ethnicity, and life styles.
Critique - peter bihl
I thought your metaphor of the three little pigs to the Chesapeake and New England colonies was very enjoyable and has a lot of potential.
Watch out for spelling, (imediate and sucess) haha!
Critique - katie keefer
Short and to the point, yours would make it very easy to write the rest of this paper because of the introduction of points without going into detail. Good!
The colonies of the Chesapeake and New England areas grew into two totally seperate and distinct societies despite the fact that they were both settled by England. There are many reasons why they differed including religion, climate,and social standing. The Puritans who mostly settled in New England came for religious freedoms, but the people who made up the chesapeake region came to seek wealth that they never could have hoped to come upon in their home country. These peoples incentives and beliefs caused their seperate societies to become so different while living so close.
Patrick, although I may sound like a broken record we are writing an introductory paragraph. If this were to be followed up with another paragraph there wouldn't be much left to say. You should probably just stick with generalities in the first paragraph and add specific instances in later sections.
Katie, I really like your paragraph. It had just the right amount of information and was short enough to actually be a paragraph. I think most people were being careful not to leave anything important out and their paragraphs ended up a little too lengthy.
peter, i enjoyed you paragraph very much but i didn't get the whole point behind the three pigs...still it had good points!
AMBER!!! you always write so amazingly with good style and large amounts of info.your brilliant don't forget that!
Pocahontas and John Smith. Although these people are from England they are distinctly different, even though they are a minority in the grand scheme of things. So the question is why the English in New England and the English in the Chesapeake are different by the year 1700. First off this question is misleading; they had little more in common than the English heritage. The differences between the New England region and the Chesapeake region are vast but the predominant themes are they came here for different reasons, had different environments and different obstacles.
As we all know there were many differences between New England and the Chesapeake region. Differences were, ways of life, government, and most importantly religion. In the chesapeake area there were more men than women who had settled there, which meant that they wanted to come to America and look to have a family here. The Chesapeake area also differed from the New England development because religious views were completely different, though religion was a major role in both settlements New England was focused and based upon the Puritan belief while the Chesapeake region focused their belief in the Catholic religion. Later in New England puritanism had declined.The Chesapeake region also had slaves and indentured servents to do their work unlike the Puritans of New England, Chesapeake colonies were becoming independent! New England had become more of a mixed economy with cities and more urban-like culture.
When one thinks of colonial New England they think of pilgrims. For the Chesapeake they think of Pocahontas and John Smith. Although these people are from England they are distinctly different, even though they are a minority in the grand scheme of things. So the question is why the English in New England and the English in the Chesapeake are different by the year 1700. First off this question is misleading; they had little more in common than the English heritage. The differences between the New England region and the Chesapeake region are vast but the predominant themes are they came here for different reasons, had different environments and different obstacles.
1.)As well molly I like that you metioned the second sons seeking wealth I think that it was more of a forgotten fact!
People began to leave England in the 1700's for multiple reasons. These reasons were usually gold, glory, or God. The settlers in the southern colonies went to North America in search of gold. These settlers planned on finding large amounts of gold or other valuables and then returning home. These settlers however soon realized that gold actually wasn't so abundant. Then they began to grow agriculturally and became big farmers. Once these settlers found out about tabacco it became a major cash crop for the southern settlers, because it was so scarce in England. Land also became one of, if not the most important thing someone could own. Through agriculture is how the southern colonies thrived. The northern colonies on the otherhand came for religious reasons. There were two groups that came they were the puritans and the pilgrims. The puritans left with return to England still in mind after God would purify the church. The pilgrims were a group of sepratists who left England due to religious persecution, who had no intent to return to England. Both of these religious groups ended up in Massachusetts. Therefore with two seperate desires comes two very different societies.
Kyle I really like the way you wrote your paragraph, good choice of words. I thought it was very informative with less(take up space words). Maybe you could have wrote a little more about the differences for coming to America of the two societies.
1.Response to Patrick- Patrick i like how you included that the people who settled in Massachusetts were fairly weathly, and the people who settled in the Chesapeake area mostly came off as poorer people, due to the fact that alot of them were indentured servants.
2.Response to Peter- Peter I thought your analogy with the three little pigs was great and quite accurate. Also, it was a consise paragraph that got the point across.
While settlers of the southern and New England colonies were all from England, the differences between the colonies are tremendous. While Southern colonies lacked central government, based their economy on Tobacco, and relied on imported labor; John Winthrop cracked the whip in Massachusetts. Settlers of the New England colonies centered their actions around the tenets of Puritanism, managed labor themselves, and thrived on rivers and ports. New England formed very systematically, with a strong government, a powerful sense of family, and assigned land plots. In respect to each other, the colonies almost seem to only exist in contrast.
Critiques:
Peter, your paragraph avoids banality, without doubt. The three little pigs might be a stretch of an analogy though. I think I might fear writing it. I'd call it risky, rather than original... though I guess the two often go hand-in-hand. Nonetheless, the paragraph is concise and clear and the points are both valid and well-presented. Good paragraph, for sure.
Jake, you also brought up good points. I think your paragraph is pretty appropriate in its length too. However, it's kind of ramble-y in its syntax (place 'dem commas and semicolons!). That kind of distracts me from reading the content of the paragraph. Good overall, without doubt!
For "Timothy"
I liked it. It was to the point and said what had to be said. One suggestion I have is to maybe have included the term Primogeniture, rather than just the concept, but it's not that big of a deal.
Even though both the New England colonies and Southern colonies were mainly settled by the English, they went put in completely different directions when it came to building a colony. The New England colonists were in it for the long haul. They were willing to put in the work needed to start a society. The Southerners, however, were poor young men trying to make a quick buck and immediately become part of the upper class. They weren't ready to put forth the effort required to sustain a farm, or a civilization.
For Alex
Nice job with sticking to the point yet including useful details. (Nice wisecrack on Waynesboro BTW) Also, the paragraph itself was nicely structured
A- Peter Bihl. You're a nerd. Who would think of that? Even though it is a pretty fly comparison, you're still a nerd. And what I mean is, that's hot how you came up with putting those two together to make a good paragraph.
B- Is Ross actually Molly? Whoever it is, nice writing. Short, sweet,and to the point. I'm impressed.
In response to Peter Bihl:
A good analogy to engage your reader. The only problem
I can see is that your introductory paragraph is a little too self contained
In response to Amber:
I am not so sure of this statement "Very rarely did entire families migrate." The prompt is to talk about New England and the Chesapeake so you might want to include the Dutch, Swiss, and Netherlands. On that same note the puritans came for the long term. An overall Very good essay, not much of an introductory paragraph but well written and true
1. I liked what Dylan said about how the English in New England interacted with the Indians alittle more cautiously than the Chesapeake settlers.
2. I also liked what Matthew said about how citizens were governed by rich landowners who represented large areas, while the southern settlers were governed by democratic town meetings (although just for men), and were inspired by relegion more than just straight politics.
1) England had several reasons behind the two very different colonies that would soon emerge in the new world. One big difference for the men that migrated to the Chesapeake colony was due to primogeniture. Many i fthe men wnated to get rich quick and were trying to avoid not enheriting anything back in England. Another reason would be, because of primogeniture there were many more men in the Chesapeake than women. New England on the other had was based more upon the Puritians wanting religous freedom and "a more pure people." They were also seeking long term ventures here and to create a "colony on a hill" to set an example to all other people that did not follow their religion. Another difference would be how the two colonies developed governmentally, and agriculturally. The New England colony was based upon fishing for cod and the Mayflower compact. Which was a more free deomocracy for all men that were pilgrims were as the Chesapeake established the House of Burgesses. Which entailed the rights of english men and gave control to the king. Also on one final note the Chesapeake region was baesd more upon farming compared to the north that would soon become more industrial.
In response to Chet,
I thought your introductory paragraph had a lot of information. Maybe there was too many facts for just the beginning of a paper though. There was also a few words that were spelt wrong, so I would look over your paragraphs and check for the spelling. Good job CHET!
In response to Patrick,
Your introductory paragraph had a lot of potential, but I don't think everything flowed very smoothly. You had a good amount of information, and I liked how you gave a little bit of detail for each reason. Your paragraph could have also had a better thesis statement. Good job Patrick!
to suzi
I like the fact that you stayed on topic throughout the paragraph. I liked how you told us about the two colonies plans when they were coming over, you did a really good job.
to Jennah
You did a great job on your on it. It was full of details and you were the first one on here. Thats hard because then everyone is talking about your paper. good job!
Various groups of people came to America from England with different goals to accomplish. For this reason, New England veried considerably from the Cheasapeake region. New England was largely settled for religious purposes. Therefore, whole families came over providing many different professions. For this reason, and because of the fact that the land was not good for agricultural purposes, New England was made up of many cities. The Chesapeake, however, was settled mainly by second sons and poor people wanting to get rich. Although they did not find any gold, the fertile soil of the south made it possible to grow tobacco, which became their gold. Because of the high demand for tobacco, the south was made up of many plantations.
2) I like what Jennah and Valerie both said about the government in the north and south. Also i thought it was very detailed maybe a little long for and introductiry paragraph but besides that they were great. :) One more thing that a few other people brought to attention was the reasoning behind why so many men came to the Chesapeake was due to primogeniture but not many people could remember the exact word for it. But the fact that alot of people brought that up is great! =]
Variation in settlement procedure and subsequent development [pertaining, that is, to the eventual New England and Chesapeake colonies] certainly remains dependant upon a multiplicity of antecedents: the nature of the land upon which each general “group” of colonists settled, the disposition of each particular Native American population, available resources, the status in England at the time of each colonization effort. However, most prominent within all influencing factors remains that of motive: that which was considered important within each specific movement of colonization provided instigation for particular development. In this manner [assessing in a general sense, of course], religious devotion proved particularly influential in the development of New England settlements; in contrast, those populating the Chesapeake locality remained fixated, for the most part, upon the commonly pursued aspiration of worldly wealth. Much occurred as consequences of these specifically individual purposes: stratification of society [highest “status” depended upon these specific areas of importance; clergy (New England) and merchant planters (Chesapeake) maintained exceptional power], actual method of settlement, mortality rate, status [economic and religious] of incoming settlers. Additionally, and most famously portrayed, these differentiating colonial motives contributed capaciously to the development of a uniquely “American” system of governments.
This difference in the development of the New England and the Chesapeake Bay colonies occurred for many different reasons. Both New England and Chesapeake Bay were mostly populated by the English. New England's region was built close together to form cities. Chesapeake Bay colonies were built farther apart and along rivers .The people who lived in New England came to the New World to get away from the king and to practice their religion. People who lived in the Chesapeake Bay region came to the New World to become rich. The New England colonies had a government that was based on religion. The Chesapeake Bay colonies have a government that was based on the desire of the people. The Chesapeake Bay colonies had to rely on immigration to increase their population. The New England colonies relied on reproducing. Groups of families came over together. These are some reasons why the two colonies developed in different ways.
The Chesapeake and New England regions were settled about the same time in the same New World. So what factors played a role in how these areas developed? Agriculture and religion were the two most important aspects for solidifying these colonial settlements. Government and Native American relationships were, also, key elements which distinctly defined these zones as they appeared in history.
1) Michael Mowen, I thought your paragraph was great!! You made some really good points and included things that were important. I liked how your closing sentence was related to your thesis. Good Job! =]
2) Kaitlyn Keefer =] I thought your paragraph was SUPER! It was a good length and included the main points. You set it up with a lot of potential to have a great paper. I thought your last sentence summed up the paragraph really well. WOOO! =]
By 1700, the difference in development of the New England and the Chesapeake region occured for a couple of reasons. One being the purpose of movement from England. The settlers who set foot in the Chesapeake area were seeking and expecting direct wealth through never discovered goods. In England, there was this bloke by the name of King Charles. Alot of the citizens of England didnt like they way he ran buisness. That resulted in a break of the Church and creation of Puritanism. These Puritans took a trip to New England and established a religiously tolerant colony. Other minor infulences were family values and old English customs
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1. Response to kkeefer
There was a good overall structure of your paragraph. Seems like you learned something for Mrs. Teeter. To the point; not run on.
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2. Response to kyle
Perhaps nearing the end you couldve closed it better. Left us hanging. But nice usage of vocabulary you probably learned last year in Mrs Teeters class. Another nice short, basic paragraph
cut down on other people's writing #1.
-Dylan, I think your introduction is very well written, but at the same time very lengthy. You may know already, but I think it'd be better to save some of that writing for the rest of the paper.
cut down on other people's writing #2.
-Greg, you have a very nice, simple introduction. You smoothly stated differences between them and without throwing too much information into it, which is necessary for the rest of the paper. You did all of this and a typo... *high-five*
umm...why is my name ross and everyone else's their first name? im confused...but yes michael, ross does mean molly.
Blatant differences between the mononationaloriginistic* New England and Chesapeake colonies were appearant by the end of the 17th century but can be traced back to the start of these communities. The varied conditions that incubated these distinct cultures can be separated into two main categories, the colonists and the climate. In Virginia, emboldened adventurers came to find their fortune and move prosperously back to England. Instead, they found themselves knee deep in swamp and malaria. Farther north, pious emigrants were civilizing the rocky coast of Massachusetts as opposed to being religiously persecuted in their home country. Their God-fearing ways, coupled with the harsh living conditons, led to the birth of a new society. In both cases, seeds were being sown in the politically fertile soils of North America. The distinction is found in the species of seed and quite literally the kind of soil.
*mono/national/origin/istic- having originated from one nation
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Critic's Corner
Good job Peter Bihl. Nice analogy. But I thought you were in this class last year...
Everyone did such a wonderful job it's nigh impossible to find critiquing material. Hmm.
Jennah. Well done being the first to write the paragraph. That was a pretty gutsy move. I agree with everything in it and see you kept a broad view.
Ross. Second place isn't bad. And you kept the number of sntences to a minimum while still making a point. Very good skill to have in case you're ever writing in a pinch.
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